All Comments on 'Love's Martyr'

This one lacks the tightness "Stolen Breaths" has, I don't see a reason for it. Nice end, pardon the pun.

The reason why it's not as "tight" as the other is because this is meant to be completely abandoned thought... stream of consciousness. Similar to when you can't even articulate how you feel because it is so intense and in this case it's because of loss, guilt and revenge.