by theoncomingstorm
Everything I said on ‘Raining Glass Hearts’ applies to this. It proves it was no fluke.
Great structure, great progression, great ‘voice’. Some nice images & phrases ‘His voice made me choke on my sadness’, ‘Casts shadows on future possibilities’ but again an awful lot of the phrases are standard at the very least – though again you manage to pull it off.
I am now really looking forward to your next poem. Keep up the good work – please.
Love the progression leading me onward, left me wanting more. Well done and thanks for the read.
Ability to convey emotional content to a reader without it coming across as a angst ridden teenager, have always enjoyed your work.