All Comments on 'Lucifer'

Eighteen words can say a lot sometimes: Here that happens to be true. "Matchsticks" works well for me here, as the legs' symbol:easy to light, possibly dangerous but still easy to snap in half (metaphorically?). It's difficult, it seems, to build something erotic without using "that kind of language" (body parts, graphic descriptions of "doing it"), and i love poems which DO use that language too, but you've done a nice job avoiding that here, and creating something erotic nonetheless. The title is giving my imagination quite a workout, but i'm ok with that. I might be tempted to insert a bit more punctuation, but that's me: My legs, pulled apart/Are matchsticks tipped/Red and white[period]/You stand there, ready[period]/Strike anywhere/To ignite... **adding the periods COULD (IMHO)bring a sense of separate actions (the piece is short enough that we'd still sense a quickness to it). Alternately, lose the commas and have no punctuation(?). Great read!

short, tight, sparse, with solid imagery — good job.