by RazzRajen
I can't choose a favorite section in this one. The entire poem is too good.
"swimming
like krill
in the warm blanket of Our lives
scuddles and ensconced in the warmth"
wow... It was very good until I read these lines and I thought, yes, even better. Good, good stuff.
jim : )
. . . in God's eye.
Powerful imagery as expected.
Unusual words as usual.
edits?
"minds" - should be possessive.
" beget" - should it be past tense?
this poem is complete, nothing more, nothing less.
her lips in a rictus
of unblinded lust
as He wanted her to be
a wonderful pen...you have the gift from a great muse...thanks/bluerain