All Comments on 'My Sins'

a bit heavy handed, but an overall nice feel of dischord and conflict. Nice work.

and Eve's betrayal/doubt towards God. The heroine really wasn't concerned about Adam because she hasn't gone as far as to drag anyone else down into her doubt. Yet.... one might imply that she is considering true unfaithfulness here.

where the hell is Adam while all this is going on?

The pursuit of life ~ a worthy chase.

At last ~ a really good one {poem, that is}! Don't let it go to your head. Or perhaps I ought to cultivate some of that doubt of which you speak. Sounds like cheating in such an innocent vein.