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champagne1982champagne1982about 16 years ago
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Very good imagery here. I could see your memories through your descriptions. Great use of the reliable "show don't tell" school of writing. You could stand to trim a little off this poem, starting with your litany of "I remember". I felt it was distracting about 2/3 of the way through. Try reading your poem aloud and really hear it. I think you may agree.

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