by UnderYourSpell
a bite-sized poem dedicated to an entrepreneurial parasite- kudos V :D
.....an itch. This is a prime example of how accent can affect the rhythm of a poem. I started out pronouncing every syllable as I read aloud (eg. pris-on-er) and stumbled. On second read it was smoother. I still found L6 a bit of a jolt as the emphasis fell awkwardly on o-PEN but that's a small quibble in an, otherwise, good effort.
You excell at form poems UYS.
Tess
I think you put on your early 17 century hat for this one: I see a cart in the street of Shakespeare's London. So much is ironic funny and clever, like "flying start." Made me laugh and think at once. You're good.
of the porn novel "Adventures of a Flea" rather than Donne--oh undone!
what they said and it has me all a titter and scratching my knickers--course we Mexicans don't wear knickers; we wear chonies. Which is knicker in Spanglish. Why am I bringing this up? Oh Jeez, it's simply funny. I likes.
Good stuff UYS. Getting a recommend but one question, can we send the fleas back to you lot?