All Comments on 'On His Way'

my younger brothers go through this with my dad.

Tore my heart out and your peom captures that fall from joy to heartbreak.

very good work

...and you did a nice job of capturing it. Having read this, I wonder what would happen if you revisited some of your other poems and abandoned the forced rhyme scheme.

You see, I happen to believe that you have a nice way of capturing things... unfortunately, (to me), their poignancy gets slightly trivialized by the rhyme. In this poem, despite the repetitive device, the honesty of your voice came through.

Keep plugging away, LilDarlin... I think you have the potential to grow by leaps and bounds. (You certainly have the courage!!!)

Skillful in capturing the heartache of an absentee dad.

said is what I want to say too. It made me cry -which I suppose proves the point.

this poem hits hard, LilDarlin. Well Done! Thanks for the reminder!

Bautifully expressed sentiments. Poetry like this becomes real, and brings lumps to throats.

This poem is by far your best ever (that I have seen anyways). Keep Writing!!

So simple and elementary, I could feel the child's pain, hear her voice. You found her voice and spoke it well, LilDarlin.

Don't stop writing.

on this particular topic. An impossible act to follow....Bravo!

They never go away. At least you have a wonderful way to express them, and try to let go. This was real, and many felt it. You captured it, and shared it in a touching way.

Loss is hard enough in life. But when your are made to relive the pain time and time again, it is such a deep heartache.

I could see the little girl as your poem played out. You made it so real. Keep up the writing I look forward to many more.

Poignantly rending a daughter's love as Dad never shows.........