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by zell19861986

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jthserrajthserraabout 20 years ago
This one felt just too vague...

and even though intoxicated, I thought it would improve with some more concrete imagery. You'll want to change your to you're in stanza 5. I think with a bit of work, this one will be a solid poem.

jim : )

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