All Comments on 'One Moment'

An interesting poem; placing thoughts of an entire life within a glance between strangers, or it could be real and the entirety of life is but a moment's glance. This poem has a nice double layer possibility of meaning.

Some of the central part's expressions are unexpected and good (particularly the mushroom caps), but some of the 'thoughts' are written in fairly trite phrases. I think this poem could be made more enticing if you rewrote the more common 'thoughts' using fresher words.

Keep writing!

IN A SINGLE MOMENT~

awesome and clever

very good poem hotti~