All Comments on 'Panty Free'

might improve with some editing, very descriptive, maybe less so would add a little mystery, last line is the zinger (is it needed or is it too mundane, we all feel that way, i.e. every home is a prison of sorts), leave out "mom" to make more universal and less a teenager if that is the case, my opinion but do as you wish

Not a teenager. It was in my mom's pond! :)

Thanks for the feedback.

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