All Comments on 'Percival'

Sadness's bleached bones : you have an effortless way with words , Dem! High-5 ed .

we're never quite the same once having heard the banshee - steps along nicely without pushing our faces into its form. :) you're missed on the forum!

I'm going to disagree with butters on this one, demure. Because I think you know that I regard you as one of the most accomplished poets on Lit, I trust you'll take my comments as constructive criticism and reflect on them or disregard as you see fit. As always, your word choice and rhthym are wonderful. The Banshee's wail packs a wallop. Nonetheless, I felt you could have pared back the length of the poem. The first line, in particular, felt forced to me for the sake of establishing the meter. The poem also had, I think, redundancies, perhaps best represented by "good fun."