All Comments on 'Pilgrimage to Elysium'

Elysium an imaginary place brought to life. Nicely done — you captured tumescence, orgasm moment/rush, and afterglow. OK, there are lines that were perfect for me, others I might delete/change, but this poem resonated. Just as does the unencumbered enthusiasm you share whether your biographical sketch, your pieces around Suzie and Moriah, or this first dip into poetry — can feel your excitement and talent.

OMG was this so vivid and intense. I wish main-stream lit would/could publish this. The arc of feeling in the poem was really wonderful.