All Comments on 'Public Transit'

I especially like poems that make me wonder about things like format. That being the case, I have two questions...

What would the poem read like if you had no placed inital caps on every line?

What wolud happen if you trimmed some of the prepositions, and let the imagery/description come out a little more?

Regardless, I will happily look for future postings from you. Nice job.

and fun to read! Needs some work, yet, but a clever idea and interesting poem.

you seem to have a nice grip on phrasing / i very much look forward to further poetry from you here /

is a good one, now on to learning to show and not tell, there are some pronoun mistakes and some cloudy imagery, but with some work, this could be really good :)

...and found it intriguing enough to check out this poet's other work. What a find! I can see development in the four posted so far, keep writing Carillon.

I voted but do not use the therm.

I don't know if your other readers were male, but man, that reminds me of some rides when I was horny as hell and each jerk was like a deep thrust riding the edge of orgasm! Grit your teeth and pay for home to come fast!!!!