All Comments on 'ripe'

Hello There!

I am brand new to attempting poetry and though I am here to have fun, I am also here to learn. I am humbled by the talent that lurks and speaks here and would deeply appreciate any comments and feedback you would be willing to share.

In much love and gratitude,

~CiC

I loved the content but felt it was a bit wordy and too long....felt a bit more like prose.....I look forward to reading more from you.....well done :)

Whilst I agree that this is a little too wordy, I think it's length serves to heighten the humour of the secret, revealed at the very end.

Perhaps a more structured verse form would improve the readability, but overall, this is a clever, witty poem.

EM:)