by firegoddess76
For powerful lines,
"I want to rush, you hold it together"
is one of them. Strong, and emotional and on the safe side from clich?s that could make it corny. I see them now and then in your poems, but they are too few and too far apart to hold the pieces together. You could distill your writing and use that kind of subtle but not too subtle imagery a bit more, to achieve something really good here. Keep em coming.