All Comments on 'Satisfied'

playful, tender and relaxing

Loved the " toying toes"

Thank you

Oh I liked this one too, don't let the grammer police or those who can't control their urge to tell ya your esctasy is cummin apart...hehehe A tantalizing and great work of Art. I liked the toying toes too as tath said.

I'm not the Grammar Police but Spell Check's a help to catch those typos. Pssst, MET! - you lost a "Y" <grinning>

Still, I like this poem.

Good feelings and phrases. But why are you still yearning for fulfillment in the fourth stanza. I thought it was satisfied? Still very hot.

1st stanza is good. You show instead of telling. Same as the second stanza. "Toying toes" was a nice surprise--very loving and intimate.

I would like to have seen more of this throughout the poem. In stanza 3, you give us feelings: passion, desire, lust and love. That's not so bad but those words are used way to often and they are abstract. Toying toes are concrete. I can see you and your lover's playful toes. I can't see passion unless you, as a poet, give me, the reader, details of your passion. Passion for you may be the way your lover's skin tastes like cinnamon because he tried to bake you something special and spilled the spices (perhaps, intentionally) all over himself. And now you couldn't give a damn about the pie or whatever. You want to simmer this man in your bed and eat him all up. Oh, feel the passion, girl!

Anyway, good poem that could be better, but most poems, including mine, could be better. :) Please keep writing and growing!