All Comments on 'Saturday'

There's such wonderful movement in this from stanza to stanza. The enjambment works so well as does the sparse in-the-line punctuation. I might have done "chewed" instead of "ripped" in l9, but what a delighftul poem!

which normally I don't really go for. a good pining poem well written, great movement and pace, with enough as GM mentioned punctuation to slow down the read so that it's comprehensible