All Comments on 'Screams in the Night'

"The bear seeks the sweet dripping honey

His lover opens her flower to his desire"

as well as the juxtaposition of heat and ice in the images here in

"Strangers form a bond of friendship that the sun cannot melt".

Some of the other lines are a little too overly poetic and might benefit from more editing or simplification. Inclusion of expressions such as "bump and grind" might be substituted with less cliched phrases (the burning stuff as well because if sex was a fire there would be no second flare-ups; note how many poems on the site have burned this fire image) and more description of mental description that you excel at. Think of the process as not writing a poem but rather sending a message...

p.s.souls windows=soul's window

I can almost taste that first kiss...

Constructive thoughts and words are always encouraged and appreciated.