All Comments on 'Shower'

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KOLKOREKOLKOREover 16 years ago
I bet you guys keep very clean!

As to the comment, it's true to a point. The level that is shown though is the mutual feelings love joy erotic attraction etc. which are demonstrated through the description rather than named. Liguistically speaking, Showing vs. telling is a multi layer / context depending proposition.

ghost_girlghost_girlover 16 years ago
another storyteller

such a good idea. then all you do is tell the reader about it. Why not let the suds be the explanation, the tickle, find a way to present this material so you aren't telling it. Let the suds, bubbles become active. then you will have an awesome poem!

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