All Comments on 'skelter helter'

Love the idea but this is way too long. The first stanza and all those like it are excellent. Edit like a bastard.

Like the previous comment said, you have a lot of good stuff going on here. But I feel it is cannibalizing on itself by being just too...massive. Lots of ground to cover in the middle, and I'm exhausted when I get to the last stanzas that again has some real gems in them.

"It's quite out of fashion for poetry to rhyme."

Who cares, when you do it just fine? :D