All Comments on 'Song of Indolence and of Experience'

It has a simple rhyme scheme and isn't trying to portray itself as "great" poetry, but it's funny and clever. Sometimes that's just right. :)

Your poem is recommended in the New Poems review thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum. Thanks for the read! :-)

Angeline

What a smashing way to start the day. A smile but then there's something buried in there makes me wonder if it's not hurting anyone .. why not?!! Well done and thankyou

Done.

who in the hell recommended this? who in the hell zapped it?

Well Done. More fun, less angst. Like oily water into deep/

And turbid pools/ BTW excellent trans stanza enjambment. Indolence ROCKS!

I remember Pascall dubious theological bet, I remember thinking: Huh? I can believe more in a guy making me soon a millionaire if I just send him some money ... Some believer... But I am not not as romantic as to drool over the natural happy simple life of s fly or a rose either ... So I guess we connect over booze, insomnia and the fantasy of at least catching some good pickup lines!