All Comments on 'SP Essence # 1'

it sounds cool and interesting, but I don't get it, and I'm confused in your imagery. I think you can have cool, interesting, imagery and clarity. I hope you clear a few things up in your next poem, cause I have a feeling I could like reading you.

And so I get drawn in to some of your images and want to love this poem with everything in me. But, I don't get it. Your conjunctions and prepositions are used in such a way that I cannot follow your path. It feels like this poem is about a million things, and just when I'm about to grasp the idea of one, you switch to something that doesn't connect for me.

Keep writing. Work on flow. That's the part that's lacking.

thick bricks distort images

could be anything

(which is the point)

imitation dali surrealism

sometimes clawed hands, abdomen grown,

reach back and grab their own ass,

sometimes another

smudged mirror overflown concave

just make it what you want

and plug the hole

more finely distilled. This is only cologne, a copy cat fragrance.

its like the essence of SP, his isnt the easiest poetry to understand, but once you get it, its like, wow :) I am just coming back to this one, loved #2, I think they are becoming more focused as the series progresses. keep writing and posting-M