All Comments on 'splinter'

I like the way it reads but it seems to be 2 poems in one.

It is like my present followed by youth.

but I have some difficulty seeing the connection between the first stanza and the rest of the poem. I may be missing something, but it seemed like 2 poems, the second was very good. Combined I am a bit befuddled.

jim :)

My favorite part:

"we jump off splintered docks

iron oxide nail stains

tannic acid brown skin

tastes of fish milt

released over egg masses..."

I think this is the strongest section of your poem because it paints a particularly sharp visual.