All Comments on 'Sunday Mourning'

That is finding something so well modelled and developed here. More! More! More!

awesome poem, love the language, felt like janis joplin at the original threadgills. I love a fresh voice, will be coming back to read more of you

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only weak section the first three and last line of this stanza did not feel like they fit:

I imagined you and me under covers.

You were happy and had blue eyes.

I pulled the linen up over my head,

and your fireflies lit my mind.

I saw the frail hairs

on your arms and neck glowing

in a dim yellow haze.

And you laughed and you were happy.