All Comments on 'Tabloid Author'

because you've already implied what it says with the whole poem. And if you take it away, ending on the "say thank you for shopping here" you have a much stronger piece with an interesting ending. Just my opinion of course.

ditto, with Ang.

and this is good

Just write the evil -kind of trite, but an excellent job of subverting the triteness with Speak no, hear no, see no... (probably better with some other punctuation)

Also don't think you need the first three lines.

Congrats - Mike, real crit's, real development

100!

Pretty good. My bias is the poem might even have been better if S4 began the poem, the last stanza followed, and S5 ended it.

I am seeing some real improvement in your work. Good for you. Getting a recommend.

now I read this one, and it is good too. Not overwritten.