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Masochista , painful 'Raptor ?!! 5-ed .

An interesting sentiment. I especially liked these lines:

"before You i was torn

between what i thought i should be

and what i knew i'd want and need"

Hm... I also think your poem could use a few line breaks, to separate the separate ideas in there. At one point I had some trouble determining where the "sentence" started and ended:

"at Your little one's life

like the rusty bloodied knife

that she had always known

with you, Sir, i have flown

never a moment of regret"

In my mind, there is a "stop" missing between the third and fourth line above.

You are right. When I'm typing I hear it in my head and sometimes skim over what I'm actually writing and miss things like that. Thank you for pointing that out :)