by MINKX
This is a good idea but possibly spoilt by 'forced rhyme'.It left me with the impression that if it was written with the same ideas being expressed but without rhyme at all it could be very strong."Cuz" is not the best.
gripping piece,
you can tell that
this is coming from experience
the pain is very real.
very strong emotions here
and I thought the rhyming
was just fine.
~ J