All Comments on 'The ballad of Sherlock Holmes.'

I liked this, though the repetition sort of felt out of place, and I think you could have done a whole lot more with it if you'd gone a little more 'free' with it and not stuck so assiduously to a pattern.

"drinking broke my will to live..."

that particular chunk I can very much appreciate, and I like the way you set it down, but I don't know if putting it in there twice is the best idea (as a reader, it gets a little old, the second time.)

Overall, I'd say this was a poem with a lot of potential, though it needs trimming in spots, would benefit from pulling the pattern of it out and could use a bit of re-working. If you want to, I'd love to read it after you've beaten on it for a while, and if you want any more feedback from me, feel free to private message me any time.

~D.A.