by seasparks
Not being a poet, I seldom read poetry. If it builds a picture for me, and induces some emotion, I like it, if not, I don't.
This read as if from the heart. I could empathise with the subject. As such, it scores high for me. I'll be reading more of your offerings.
Thanks.
I'm a beginner, yet I still found the last two lines out of place.