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I have very mixed feelings about this. The first two lines of every stanza range from good to excellent:Crows flutter above the rye/ Their intention's a mystery. The last two lines, trite to very bad:When you turned and said good bye/ Part of me died in misery. But that takes them out of context, in the context of the structure, I hear a very wistful ironic song. I can almost hear the music.

made me dizzy and giddy, I feel like I've travelled the world in just a few minutes. The poem was delivered in a staccato style with disconnected elements and rapid-fire verses. But what does that matter if it was a winner.