All Comments on 'The light goes out, ...'

by leBonhomme

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GuiltyPleasureGuiltyPleasureover 10 years ago
I've said it.....

....before so here goes agian...It's nigh on impossible to compose a rhyming erotic poem. This one would be a good fit if Hallmark dabbled in porn cards. It is very likely erotic to others - but not to me. Sorry. I did vote though.

leBonhommeleBonhommeover 10 years agoAuthor

Oh, you are right, no question, and your poems are better.

I'm just having fun, trying to rhyme, letter for letter;

Weak on emotion with dirty metric feet.

With Tristesse, sadly I cannot compete.

erectus123erectus123over 10 years ago
I enjoyed the poem

keep in mind "to cum" is different then "to come"....not that it matters as long as you do. Also, I must protest that your condescending remark about "whores" hurt me to the quick, where ever that is located? Who can say a bad thing about whores? They make man's life a dream, albeit a wet dream, and what's so bad about that? Morality has no place in sexual activity, unless you are having sex with a priest or priestess, then it is hard to withdraw, I guess. But still worth the effort? Here is food for thought. The higher the religious position, the less guilt after the act. So it is best to only deal with the higher ups, in what ever position you prefer, although sometimes one should compromise if the position is uncomfortable or reminds one of a whore....

leBonhommeleBonhommeover 10 years agoAuthor

Glad you liked it. I didn't like that word either, but it rhymed.

"The higher the religious position, the less guilt after the act."

Priest, bishop, cardinal, ...?

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