All Comments on 'The Monster Left Behind'

An interesting range in the eight poems you had posted on 22 May. The three that show the most promise seem to be the darker ones; they show greater depth of feeling and, unfortunately, have more typos. Besides this one, the other two are:<br>

<i>That Which Silently Destroys</i><br>

and<br>

<i>The story of a girl...</i><br>

You have generally done well with spelling some fairly large words but then you seem to stumble in surprising fashion on others such as in 'Destroys':<br>

"when <b>niavity</b> [naivety] kept me from what I had to do."<br>

Or in the first strophe in 'story':<br>

"who <b>his her</b> cries"<br>

Perhaps it is in the nature of more raw emotion in these three poems that allowed for more glaring errors. Let loose your emotions when you write your first draft, then put a tight cap on the emotions while you slowly edit and polish that which you've written. Keep on writing — you're showing promise here.