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Click herehunting all thru the night
searching for that elusive prey
looking all of my life
finding nothing but strife
deer, boars, and elk
have caught them all
still struggling for that one
the one who always evades
runs and hides, never stays
have a hunger deep inside
a thirst nothing else can quench
need to find this obsession
luck will one day be mine
will have that day of glory
can feel it creeping near
sensing its every fear
away I go and hide
listening
watching
waiting
still no sign
stomping my feet
into the ground
anger overcoming
needing
trying so hard
searching
watching
waiting ~
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wondering if you ever
feel as if you are that prey?
heart beating
racing
eyes wide with fear
feet never touching the ground
all ways running
the fear set deep in your soul
eating you alive
praying for a way out
escape is the only way
hiding low
outta sight
praying one day to be free
free from being the prey
so you go and hide again
hoping one day this will all end~
this is the best one i've read yet! your doing great! everyone can feel it because everyone has been in both positions. even as you, all at once!
You certainly have a way with words. I could feel the emotions all through the poem as I read it. Keep up the standard, Lildarlin. I look forward to many more words from you.
Am I mistaken, or could this be the same person, from 2 different points of view? Both are in hiding, one from a hunter, the other from their obsession. Clever shift in points of view.
When you suddenly turn around and ask,
"wondering if you ever
feel as if you are that prey?"
The second section appealed to me slightly more than the first (I think just because the idea of hunting deer, etc. is beyond my stomach's abilities ;-), but both were excellently written!
wow, what a witty write, love the play with words.
and of course deer and boar...grin,
I really liked this one Lil, it stood out and spoke to me, I felt like I was inside it as I was reading it. Very well written!