by UnderYourSpell
...from your latest batch of vignettes. This is more condensed, less directly narrative, and delivers, at least to me, a heavier emotional punch. And some killer lines.
a suitcase full of misdemeanours
trailing from broken locks,
and I agree with Liar about some wonderful lines here, but it weakens toward the end as it seems too vague to me. Some poems hit it on the nail, some not quite but I'd work with what's good here. Your considerable talents are never absent from your poems.
When I feel my last line is not really last line material, I often move it to the top. Makes for a fun flip, a preview.
I love suitcase full of misdemeanor.
Thanks for the read! I could relate :)