All Comments on 'The Salesman'

Your rhymes seem to be rather forced in to fit and the line lengths are all over the place.

with the previous comments, the story (poem) was interesting and I think for a first submission it deserved a little better score.

Well the writer has obviously put in a lot of work to create this versey, songy thingy, and one has to appreciate the effort, but it remains so predictable and thus boring that I really struggled to finish it. My score is purely for the effort and not for the result. The result needs more feeling.

you lost me on the first Stanza, nothing of interest, the first lnne of the second stanza, cliched it. The 75 is because I didn't read the rest of it.