All Comments on 'The Sliced Table'

Very well written and deserving of a second or third read.

I would suggest that you break this into strophes. Beyond that I will not comment. - This poem is too close and personal for me.

Definitely requires multiple reads before voting or commenting!

I don't like the emotions you bring back to me, but I acknowledge them. - A must read!

I disagree with the comment below. I do not think strophe breaks are necessary at all. I like it fine just the way it is.

Grammatically (and you are punctuating here according to rule), the semi-colon after line 6 is incorrect.

in the New Poem Review thread: http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?p=15408586#post15408586

jim : )

in the New Poem Review thread: http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?p=15408586#post15408586

jim : )

Another wonderfully haunting write

Culling emotions unseen

From the reader's own soul...

Invited in to your kitchen

I treasure these little moments

when I can warm my hands

with a cup of tea or chocolate

so we can trade stories

that table looks

so very much like a map

or ancient aztec plain lines

that once had meaning

and now have lingering mystery

i imagine a country there sometimes

trying to see you as a child

playing in those streets

I liked it...its worth the second read to get its impacted.

thank you for a glimps into your world.