All Comments on 'The Snake Charmer'

It really flows beautifully and the rhyme is just right. There's a lot of insight in this poem imo, and great use of metaphor, too.

This is a good poem. I like the flow and found it

educational in some sort of way. whynot

Oh my, snake charmer

hehehe very witty Du.

"I pray someday

For the return of your daystar glitter

Once a man so brave who knew his way

Living within the oak a desire bright that burns

and a life lead no longer bitter"

dreamy,

I think I said this before, but I wonder if the rhyming scheme is absolutely necessary. You are such an amazing writer, it might be interesting to get away from the "tyranny of the rhyme" as it has been called.