by RazzRajen
but felt the expansive alliteration at the end was too much and detracted from the whole.
As for the alliteration, how about an extra line break to give the reader a pause:
So Many cannot
they are only looking
transient images, vacuous faces
nameless shifts and madding mobs
merely meeting in meandering
manners manifold maunderings
My maudlin drinks
Am I the pianoman
or Only the Trumpeteer
I think this is my favorite of yours since I have been here at Lit..love this line especially:
sometimes
time stops to keep it perfect
yeah, thats a comforting thought, and also very enlightening, if true..explains why my time just keeps rolling along...downhill ;) :rose:
thanks razz, and belated happy birthday