All Comments on 'The Walk'

by demure101

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twelveoonetwelveooneabout 11 years ago
seriously

either R.Frost, or 1201 said it better, wanderlost

DawnJDawnJabout 11 years ago
A sense of adventure

That's what's needed, and a willingness to go wherever the new path leads. And a willingness to let go of preconceived notions about the journey's end! Good one!

AngelineAngelineabout 11 years ago
This is very well done

the poem meanders like a walk and it's very tactile with all the sense-grabbing description. I like the somewhat surprising ending but feel that it's not enough: what exactly is the twist that rattles the narrator at the end? It's sort of a tease not to tell, but maybe you wanted to leave it vague. I think you can do that but still add something more, some hint or even just a shocking image that gives the end of your poem the punch it deserves.

SweetOblivionSweetOblivionabout 11 years ago
Perhaps that's what comes of taking the path less travelled

I do hope it made all the difference. S.O.

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