All Comments on 'The Waters of Summer'

What a striking narrative vignette this is. I just loved it and the way you have written with such detail and precision. :)

This is hot and wonderful and true-not made up fantasy crap-real life feelings. Wow.

to read over and over..savor the descriptions and feel the longing, great work :)

I think this poem has great potential. What's done so far in really moving, but it feels like another draft or two are left to finish.

BTW, unless you have your reasons, "summer" does not get a capital and "Coke" does.

I hope there is an refined version coming, because this is delicious!