All Comments on 'The Way You Walk'

'I don't know how you wear the bruises'

Great description!!! >^..^<

...of lust and bruises, especially in light of the tender tone of the speaker. Unfortunately, because I did find myself intrigued by that, I found myself wanting a bit more of that.

There are some wonderful phrases in this. Push the tenderness/bruises a little more and you'll have an emotionally more powerful piece.

The first two stanzas are super, I like the rest but they lost the power for me. I think they could be trimmed down as the intensity of the poem should increase, I think that making the poem more and more "quick" cutting words phrases lines will bring that home. Thanks for this! A nice read to start the day.

at "lustful gaze" ahh, Bele, you are a MUCH better writer than that!!! please, find something crisper for that part, okay?

I loved this one. It's just a lil tease, as she is to you. The flow was great and the imagery..Spottt on~~!! It could use a lil work to bring it full bloom, but still a great poem. Full of emotion an temptation~~

More Please~~