All Comments on 'Things I Noticed While Holding Hand'

A real bubbly and teenage innocent poem,

full of young-time, first love, type thoughts.

You might drop a couple of "I noticed" in lines where you use it twice.

Normally I would suggest that you cut some words and tighten the poem up,

but with this one I fear the naivet? flavor that makes the work refreshing would be the first victim.

A cute little read.

that lends nicely to the long, flowing lines. I do agree with YDD that the superfluous I notices could be dropped. Otherwise, a very nice poem.

jim : )

is my favorite. The whole picture works well, the words make me feel good and the image makes me long to hold hands. Quite nice.