All Comments on 'Together'

that so ofter people use bare, which means to expose. But using it as first word with capital brings the noun (as in grizzly bear) to mind and distracts from the poem's message. There is a bit of the "roses are red" school here that takes away. I would suggest, forget rhyme when message is more important and get that clear first for a stronger work. Also drop authors note, it distracts.Should only be used to wxplain hidden info. Better to add comment after poem is posted. Just a suggestion.