by steve porter
...if you moved the first line to the end of the poem, adjusting the line breaks to keep the same verse form?
I ask, because the way it stands right now, the poem didn't seem to "earn" the title. I would also add a comma to the title, right after "Tomorrow"... making the reader pause.
Are your poems all written for just one person and is that person coming? Thats what I got... Thanks
I like the end rhyme. It made me feel your rhythm without being too forceful