All Comments on 'Trilobite'

So many meanings and levels of thought;

Enough, I hope, to give every reader pause...

pretty much just wieghing in with score

like this end for the title

sawn in the stone:

inhabited.

and so is the poem, but I think it could maybe be clarified a little bit. YOu lost me somewhere around line 6 I think. I felt it needed some breaks and the ..... interrupt the whole thing.

I am not putting your work down, understand, I enjoyed the poem, but it could use some work. and heck, i didnt even know "sawn" was a word, so I even learnt something :)

once an ancient and humble thing

as common as carbon and stone

endures the age old elements

or the pullpush pressure of time passing

rolls itself up and digs itself in

determined to be remembered

and answers it's own question

My love will still be here,

but where oh where are you?

Enjoyed the read.

this, I found of questionable necessity, and below the rest of the poem:

dripping erotic truth

in remote impossibility

and it also, IMO, takes away form the beautiful grouping below it, namely:

and still, still... still it is a woman

so like a river

This:

sawn in the stone:

inhabited.

... is excellent.