All Comments on 'turn back away'

I like sound play, alliteration, internal rhyme, etc. It is always a balancing act of how much to have in a poem before tipping into the overdoing it category. I know that it was overdone for a purpose of tone, but still, I feel it went a bit too far.

Having said that, I did like the overall idea, and this:

"quiet stone bends a shapes

limpid lithographs and petroglyphs

left as ancestors before me:"

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