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I think this has great possibilities in the way you treat your theme but it's almost hidden by too many words. If you could simplify your poem it would sing.<P>

Tess

This I liked a good deal. Woman seeks the virgin youth in her seasoned man, thinks he is gone, but rediscovers him in her lover's vitality and their interaction.

Good work! I favorited it.