All Comments on 'Victor'

and your language flows very nicely along with an interresting haunting imagery.

One siggection though: You start every ned line with a capital letter, even though you're in the middle of snetences. It might look nice, but it's a bit confusing, and makes me pause my reading at very odd places.

but I needed some punctuation or something to help me through this one. I think I figured it out after about 4 reads, but wow, I wanted to add some commas there. I think this is an interesting look at conquering some skeletons within you here... victorious, and yet they still hang around some... nice work.

jim : )