All Comments on 'Wet Roses'

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With this first submission;

I've run into this problem you have

On some things I've done.

Consider:

"When she showers in the morning

I linger there to watch her."

Overuse of pronouns she/her drag this down throughout.

Now try this on:

"When she showers in the morning

I linger there to watch."

Cut as many pronouns as possible. You're not writing an essay so you can concentrate on the subtle play of words and the images that are implied.